A corridor worth stopping in
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I went to the school art evening because my friend had a picture in it and because she had asked me three times. The corridor looked much as it did on Monday mornings: polished floor, pale walls, doors with numbers. Only the paper arrows suggested that I was meant to see it differently.
Halfway along, a collage caught me. It was built from bus tickets, sweet wrappers and the torn corner of a timetable. From a distance, it looked like a storm cloud; close up, it was a week of ordinary journeys pressed into one sky. I stopped. After that, I began to notice the careful shadows under a painted cup, the thumbprints left in a clay bowl, the fierce red line running through a quiet landscape.
At the end stood an empty frame labelled “Tomorrow”. Visitors were invited to pin a small drawing inside it. By closing time, the blank space had become crowded with bicycles, faces, windows and impossible animals. The corridor still connected one room to another, but for an hour it also gave us somewhere to arrive.
Analyse the writer’s use of language and structure in making this account interesting for the reader.
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