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Text C: an original fiction extract.

Amal expected subtitling the film club's short comedy to take an afternoon. She had helped write the dialogue and knew where every laugh belonged. The film followed two pupils attempting to return a borrowed ladder without its owner discovering that they had used it. At the first editing session, Amal copied the script into a document and divided it into attractive blocks of text. She chose narrow pale lettering because it left more of the picture visible. The club planned to show the film at an open evening, where families would be moving between rooms.

The first screening was for three classmates who had not worked on the film. One asked why a character had suddenly agreed to hide behind a shed. Amal explained the missing line and moved the playback back. Another classmate said the words had disappeared before he finished reading. She could read them easily because she already knew what they said. At a scene beside a bright white wall, nobody could make out the last words of an argument. The text was beautiful against the dark editing-room background and almost absent against the actual picture.

Amal began making the lettering clearer and dividing long exchanges into shorter sections. This produced another problem. One line revealed that the ladder belonged to the teacher who was about to enter the scene. In her revision, the subtitle appeared before the character spoke, and a classmate laughed before the surprise occurred on screen. Amal had treated the script as a series of sentences to fit into boxes. She was beginning to see how the timing of information could alter the story.

The script was not a perfect record either. During filming, one performer had changed a reply. In another scene, a cupboard door concealed the speaker's mouth, and the audio was difficult to distinguish. Amal guessed the words from the script. The performer later said she had actually stopped halfway through the sentence. Together they checked the recording and corrected what could be established. They did not fill the uncertain moment with dialogue merely because it would explain the action conveniently.

Some sounds needed thought as well. The film included a knock at a door while both characters were looking away. Without that information, their sudden alarm seemed unmotivated. Amal added a brief description at the moment the knock occurred. She removed a description she had written as “sinister music”, because it told viewers how to interpret an ordinary tune rather than identify a necessary sound. A classmate said that watching on a noisy bus often made him rely on subtitles. Amal had first imagined one particular audience; the practical reasons for reading were wider than that.

Before the open evening, the club watched the film with the sound muted and asked two unfamiliar viewers to try the revised version. This did not prove that every viewer would find it easy, but it exposed interruptions and gaps the team had stopped noticing. They left time to make further changes. Amal kept the original elegant lettering in a folder of rejected designs. At the screening she stood behind the audience, watching whether people could follow a story she had once thought she knew too well to misunderstand.

You are Amal. Write a speech for new film-club members explaining what your subtitling experience taught you and advising them on their next project.

In your response:

• describe your original approach and why it seemed reasonable to you
• explain what the trial screenings revealed about following the film
• advise the members how to prepare and test useful subtitles

Base your response on Text C, developing its ideas in your own words. Write about 250 to 300 words. Up to 10 marks are available for reading and up to 10 marks for writing.