Crossing the frozen reservoir
Text 1: The Drowned Spire, by Edith Carraway
An original novel extract.
The dog had gone further than Nell thought possible. From the bank he was a dark comma on the white, sitting quite still, as if the reservoir were a field and he had simply decided to rest. She called him again. Her voice went out across the ice and did not come back.
She tested the edge with her boot. It held. She put her weight on it, then the other foot, and stood there with her arms held out like a child on a wall. The ice was not white at all up close. It was grey and green and full of trapped bubbles, small silver coins frozen in the act of rising. Somewhere beneath them, she knew, was the old village: the church the water company had drowned before she was born, its spire still standing in the dark.
She walked. Twenty steps. Thirty. The cold came up through her soles and into her shins. Every few paces the surface gave a small creak, polite, like a stair in a sleeping house, and every time she stopped and waited for the next sound, and the next sound did not come.
Then it did.
It began somewhere to her left, a long whining note that ran under her feet and away towards the far bank, faster than anything should move. Not a crack. A song. Nell did not breathe. The dog lifted his head and looked at her, interested, his tail sweeping a little fan of powder across the ice.
“Stay,” she whispered, though he was the one who was safe.
She lowered herself onto her knees, then onto her stomach, the way they had been shown in a school assembly years ago and she had laughed at with her friends. Spread the weight. Be flat. Be nothing. The ice pressed its whole cold face against her cheek. She could hear it now, very faintly, ticking and settling like an engine cooling, and beneath that, or perhaps only inside her own head, the slow toll of a bell that had not rung for forty years.
She began to crawl.
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