Advice that changed the voice

Text A: an original contemporary practice extract.

My cousin offered to improve the message I was sending to advertise piano lessons. Her version called me an inspirational educator and promised a transformative journey. It sounded far more confident than my description of patient weekly practice. She had meant to help me reach people who would otherwise scroll past.

I kept her suggestion to put lesson times near the start and removed the grander phrases. If a parent telephoned, I wanted to be able to speak like the person in the advertisement. My cousin understood when I read both versions aloud. The final message was clearer than the first, but its promises stayed close to the lessons I actually intended to give.

Text B: an original contemporary practice extract.

A friend read my application to join the walking group’s committee and rewrote its opening. He described me as a strategic leader with a passion for delivering community impact. I had written that I could keep records and usually remembered to ask who had a lift home. He thought my smaller claims would be overlooked.

I accepted his advice to move my experience above the long explanation of why I liked walking. I changed the opening back into words I could say at the meeting without laughing. The friend had helped with the order, even where his chosen voice did not suit me. I sent an application that made my practical offer easier to find, without turning it into a performance I would have to continue in person.

Both texts describe the responses to the rewritten words.

What similarities do the responses to the rewritten words share in these extracts? Use evidence from both texts to support your answer.